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STUDENT01, on a scale of one to six, your response to this assignment was rated a 6. Your response was evaluated on the basis of how well it communicates its message considering important areas of writing including focus and meaning, content and development, organization, language use and style, and conventions and mechanics. A response that receives a score of six communicates its message very effectively. Typically, a response at this level clearly states the topic and purpose and maintains a single controlling point. The response is very cohesive and unified. A response at this level typically shows very effective development of ideas, with effective use of examples, evidence and/or supporting details. The response has a very effective organizational pattern. Ideas are well developed and clearly supported with details. The sentence structure is very effective, varied and free of errors. There is precision in usage and word choice as well as evidence of mastery of mechanical conventions such as spelling and punctuation. A more detailed analysis of your response is provided for each of the five important writing areas below. Writing Analysis Your response was also evaluated in terms of five important traits of writing, focus and meaning, content and development, organization, language use and style and mechanics and conventions. Each of the five areas was evaluated on a scale ranging from one to six.


Student Name
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STUDENT01 AIRFORCE

Prompt Name
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Effects of Technology
Group Name
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Composition I

Essay Submit Date
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2007-05-28 20:27:22
Score
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6 6 6 5 6 6

Briefly, the extent to which a technology affects social systems has to do with basic patterns among social groups and the changing patterns of needs and need fulfillment resulting from technological change.

When the Industrial Revolution came about and particularly when the industrialization of America took place in the last century and first half of the present century, a number of social factors changed. Many of these changes impacted not only those directly involved in the process, but also those who chose not to be involved in the industrial boom.

The key is to determine how a technology will affect the opportunity and the probable form of social systems as it alters our day-today lives. As an evolving species, humans should expect change, and the changes in social structure that result from technological innovation will determine to a large degree the quality and kind of life available to us in the future.